Diablo® III

Scoundrel page - missing word

'http://us.battle.net/d3/en/follower/scoundrel/'

Word "as" is missing from this sentence:
"These souvenirs improve his ability in combat as much, if not more than, the jewelry and other trinkets he stockpiles. "

Better:
"These souvenirs improve his ability in combat as much as, if not more than, the jewelry and other trinkets he stockpiles."

But that is still convoluted (stilted & halting with the 2 commas). Even better rewritten:
"These souvenirs improve his ability in combat at least as much as the jewelry and other trinkets he stockpiles. "
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i'm against the convoluted movement. halted sentences are sometimes more powerful when we're talking about lore which I consider a sort of prose piece.
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