Only the Valiant (a poem)

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Upon the Silken thread of this treacherous Fate
Soon shall come a power you cannot abate
Agility shall give the smallest measure of Space
And Grim reality shall come and take its place

Unkoe, Verbo, and lastly Kariv
Shall rise up and let other live
For though they fall not all is lost
Their enemies have paid a mighty cost

In this battle where Number of both do lock
It is the Envy or of dead that will hit the Shock
No Gladiator this could survive
For only the Valiant shall stay alive

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hope you enjoy this.

Go Valiant
Roses are red
Sky is blue
I downvote you.

HEY WHY ARE YOU DOWNVOTING ME? HIS POEM WASN'T GOOD. LEAVE ME ALONE YOU BULLIES.
Nice poem, here's mine, I worked really hard on it.

Up the river,
Down the stream,
I don't care about OWL,
I just want the skins.
01/07/2018 04:11 PMPosted by Bloodrose
Nice poem, here's mine, I worked really hard on it.

Up the river,
Down the stream,
I don't care about OWL,
I just want the skins.


where the rhyme tho
Not a bad poem, but Dallas Fuel are more my style.
01/07/2018 04:11 PMPosted by Buzzintate
01/07/2018 04:11 PMPosted by Bloodrose
Nice poem, here's mine, I worked really hard on it.

Up the river,
Down the stream,
I don't care about OWL,
I just want the skins.


where the rhyme tho


oh sorry my bad, lemme try again.

Blood is red,
Bruises are blue,
I want coffee.
I'm only a Valiant fan because I'm a Mercy main lol
01/07/2018 04:09 PMPosted by Makenai
Roses are red
Sky is blue
I downvote you.


if you are going to use a famous poem to mock me at least have the curtesy to use the correct lines.

roses are red
violets are blue
sugar is sweet
so is downvoating you
01/07/2018 04:11 PMPosted by ReinStein
Not a bad poem, but Dallas Fuel are more my style.


it would be much harder to do for the fuel as their names are not mostly english words.
01/07/2018 04:15 PMPosted by Azmuel
01/07/2018 04:09 PMPosted by Makenai
Roses are red
Sky is blue
I downvote you.


if you are going to use a famous poem to mock me at least have the curtesy to use the correct lines.

roses are red
violets are blue
sugar is sweet
so is downvoating you


If you had any artistic merit hidden in that yeti exterior of yours you'd understand that it was a haiku, even if shortened.
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if you are going to use a famous poem to mock me at least have the curtesy to use the correct lines.

roses are red
violets are blue
sugar is sweet
so is downvoating you


If you had any artistic merit hidden in that yeti exterior of yours you'd understand that it was a haiku, even if shortened.


you are quoting a famous poem you cant change it to a haiku, it is buchering it.

also haiku is 353 not 434
01/07/2018 04:19 PMPosted by Azmuel
01/07/2018 04:17 PMPosted by Makenai
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If you had any artistic merit hidden in that yeti exterior of yours you'd understand that it was a haiku, even if shortened.


you are quoting a famous poem you cant change it to a haiku, it is buchering it.


Ofcourse I can. That's one of art's essential traits. Transforming something old and familiar into something new and unexpected.

IT'S NOT ABOUT WRITING POEMS THAT GO "UPON THIS TREACHEROUS PATH, OH THOU SHALL NOT, HEREBY DECLARE, WRATH AND VENGEANGE UPON YOU, MY LOVE DOTH".

In any case I hope you appreciate this constructive criticism. And I hope the Valiants lose. Unless SoOn plays in them. Then I hope they win.
01/07/2018 04:24 PMPosted by Makenai
01/07/2018 04:19 PMPosted by Azmuel
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you are quoting a famous poem you cant change it to a haiku, it is buchering it.


Ofcourse I can. That's one of art's essential traits. Transforming something old and familiar into something new and unexpected.

IT'S NOT ABOUT WRITING POEMS THAT GO "UPON THIS TREACHEROUS PATH, OH THOU SHALL NOT, HEREBY DECLARE, WRATH AND VENGEANGE UPON YOU, MY LOVE DOTH".

In any case I hope you appreciate this constructive criticism. And I hope the Valiants lose. Unless SoOn plays in them. Then I hope they win.


there is changing to make anew,
and then there is working on the old.
but what you wrote was not a haiku,
though your opinion is noted and scrolled.
through critisism you did not give for no issues did you show.
i would just like you to know.
The soul of a haiku lies in its' twist
Not in a shallow form structure

~Timthetatman 2017
01/07/2018 04:36 PMPosted by Makenai
The soul of a haiku lies in its' twist
Not in a shallow form structure

~Timthetatman 2017


but the structure is what a haiku is, the soul may be the point, but the body is its form, a cat with a soul of a dog is an abomination.
boop
valiant wins
bop

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