Army of Fools-NOT COMPLETED.

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Reserved, foo.
You should write it up in Microsoft word then post it like I did with my story. Where is this taking place?

Edit - Its cool and all, I just feel a little bit lost.
I posted it here so brave souls could tell me what I needed to improve. I plan to introduce location "Soon".
Whenever there is a discussion between characters skip a line like this.

"Are you mad" Triel said.
"I want those destroyed by the time I come back from lunch" the general shouted.
"Are you mad" Triel said.
"I want those destroyed by the time I come back from lunch" the general shouted.

Thanks!
I agree with Redinferno.
Also, i think you should put the army rankings in order, where the commander is the highest rank, and he/she would be giving commands and orders to his/her inferiors (ie. generals, lieutenants, captains, majors, colonels, etc.)
I'll add this all. Thanks, guys!

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