A poem

Joeyray's Bar
Crush

Across the room, a world apart
She knows me not, though owns my heart
So bitter sweet, the youthful fuss
of naive hearts lost in a crush
The pining dreams that pass the time
and justify such simple rhyme
Yet should she speak, should I reply?
And risk, perhaps, this crush to die?
And would I lose what passions try
When lonely hearts are left to cry
Suppose it's best to miss in light
flaws hidden through dark's perfect sight
But then, perhaps the time is right
Perhaps, it's owing for tonight
to end the habit of the day
that dawns in such a lonely way
Perhaps tonight, I'll temp to start
across the room, a world apart
Regret

A friend of mine wrote a poem
He likes to rhyme, I don't know why
He asked if I'd show someone
I guess he must be kind of shy

A friend of mine talks too loud
and sometimes his jokes are dumb
He told me once, he's scared of folks
I promised I would tell no one

A friend of mine, cried one time
For no good reason, in his joint
He's such a tool, this friend of mine
Why cry for nothing, what's the point

He went away, this friend of mine
I saw him leave late last year
I guess I miss the guy sometimes
He made me happy.
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interesting.

Your second one didn't really rhyme.
Didn't like the rhythm.
...me thinks you have the wrong forum...yet, idk if the general discussion would appriciate poetry though....
i was just bored. Miss my friend
WANT MORE!
It would be cool if you could do a poem about Starcraft, too. Like about the Dark Templar or something.
First one was well done. Second was ok...
First was better.
So critical you guys! xD

Dual, those were really good. :D
I'm interested in poetry myself, but never had the talent or skill to write any. :[

You should enter competitions. :]
The winning poems were absolute crap next to yours. ^^

"Crush" has a mighty good chance of getting some sort of honor.

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